| Author | Message | ||
     Suhel Khan Username: Suhel Registered: 04-2001 |
Ek baar phir is naye assignment meN ham sab ek ghazal likheNge aur Ek Qataa likheN us bah'r meN jismeN likhnaa apne aap meN aanandmaye hotaa hai is bah'r kaa naam ... "Ramal Musamman Makhbuun Mahzuuf Maqtuu" aur iske Arkaan (Syllable kuchh is tarha haiN) 2-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-2-2 Song/Ghazal 1 ~ Tajmahal paaNv chhoo lene do phoolo ko inaayat hogii varnaa hamko nahiiN inko bhii shikaayat hogii 2 ~ Mirza Ghalib/Suraiyaa aah ko chaahiye ik umr asar hone tak kaun jiitaa hai terii zulf ke sar hone tak Chaliye to sab shuruu ho jaayeN piichhli dafaa meN time denaa bhuul gayaa thaa hameN ek hafte ke andar meN Ek Ghazal aur Ek Qataa 7 dino ke andar yahaaN post karnii hai...! to ham sabkaa assignment "10-09-05" tak submit ho jaanaa chaahiye...! khaak'saar Suhel 'Ulfat' | ||
| Alok |
Suhel Bhai, Lijiye meri gazal pesh hai jismen meri qatta bhi sammilit hai: - "Ramal Musamman Makhbuun Mahzuuf Maqtuu" 2-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-2-2 Qatta ------------------------------------------------- "Husn teraa jo kabhi ishq se aaraastaa ho Fir to khud dil men Khuda tak ke teraa raastaa ho Ik nigaahii jo kare ishq ki may pii kar tu Bedilii ka bhi paDa dil se wahin waastaa ho ------------------------------------------------- Ya Khuda! husn qayaamat hai nigah ka uske Hosh ik baar jise dekhe to sargashtaa ho Hum sadaa apne hi dil kii to kahaa karte hain Kaun jaane wo kisii baat se aashuftaa ho* Kaun 'Alok' yahaa.N paaye suraage-hastii Jo chalaa khojane khud ko wo hi gumgashtaa ho" * Ise aise bhi likha hai: Hum sadaa apne hi dil kii to kahaa karte hain Jaane kis baat hamaarii se wo aashuftaa ho Aapse guzaarish hai ki aap in dono sheron ko dekh kar bataayen ki kaun behtar hai. | ||
| Alok |
Suhel Bhai, Ek shanka ka samaadhaan kijiye: - Jab kisi bah'r ke arkaan 2-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-2-2 ki tarah ho, to kya hum 1-1 ki jagah 2 lekar sher kah sakte hain? Aapne kaha tha ki hum do short syllables ko merge ka 1 long syllable bana sakte hain. Kya hum har jagah aisa kar sakte hain? | ||
| silent_rooh Username: Rooh Registered: 08-2005 |
suhel here is my assignment.. dard ke saaye mei raat guzartii hai ye kitne armaan mire roz nigaltii hai ye zindagii naam hai ik khwaabe laa haasil ka (Q) chaahein taabeer agar hum to bigadtii hai ye kaam iss ka to yahii hai ke dilon se kheley luutne hii ko to dil shaad banaatii hai ye dushmaanii iss ko rahii mujhse hameshaaN hii kyun kyun mirey raastey kaaNton se sajaatii hai ye baabe ummeed khule koi agar muhj par to yaad maazii ke kaiiN dard dilaatii hai ye yun naseebon se gilaa kar ke mitenge na ghum kab bhalaa rone se taqdeer badaltii hai ye lafz ye rooh tirey koi nahii samjhegaa jaane kis aas mei tuu sher sunaatii hai ye Rooh | ||
| ejaz |
rooh aap yahan kya kar rahi hein | ||
| silent_rooh Username: Rooh Registered: 08-2005 |
achha to janab mujhe kahaan hona chahiye...aur merey yahaan hone se kaunsaa trafic jam ho rahaa hai..hmm.. | ||
| gauhar |
suhelji, apni assignment post kar rahi huiN.behr waakaii bahut mazedaar hai,but still feeling quite weak:-( "Ramal Musamman Makhbuun Mahzuuf Maqtuu" 2-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-1-1-2-2-2-2 qataa: jab bhi dekhuu tujhe aa jaati hai har dam manzil jaane kis rabt ko woH pyaasi hai har dam manzil guf-ta-guu mujhse merii aur woH guumsuumm aalaam kyaa huaa aaj k sharmaati hai har dam manzil ghazal: rashq rah jaayegi yeH ishq nikal jaaye jab bhool jaayeNge wo har jazb saNbhal jaaye jab hai shitaabii miri aadat hi to kyaa gham kyaa dam ik bekal raat hai kyaa uumr bekal jaaye jab dil lagaanaa ye miraa aise n mushqil hogaa bekasii kaa ye miraa khauf nikal jaaye jab ummeed-e bazm-e garmii se jalti hai shamma aas ik aur hai woH shaks pighal jaaye jab ishrat-e pal ko bachaalooN kabhii tujhse ai shab kyaa bharosaa tira har roz nigal jaaye jab bekhabar yaar mere tuu n be parwaaH hogaa ishq-e "gauhar" se yuN yeH chashm badal jaaye jab gauhar | ||
| Suhel Khan Username: Suhel Registered: 04-2001 |
Alok, Rooh, Gauhar kuchh masroofiyat zyaadaa hai isii liye shaayad maiN kuchh din baad aapk sabke assignment post karuNgaa aur shaayad merii taraf se ye aakhrii assignment hogaa magar aap log is paaThShaalaa ko hameshaa aabaad rakheNge maiN "Gauhar" aapko is bazm kaa monitor banaa rahaa huN aap hameshaa "Ek bah'r choose" karnaa aur sabko us bah'r meN assignment denaa maiN ab jabke paaThShaalaa nahiiN aa paaooNgaa aap log milke mashq karnaa kabhi-kabhaar agar mauqah mil gayaa to maiN haazir ho jaayaa karuNgaa...! aap sabke saath bahut achchhaa lagaa itne din maze meN bitaayaa...ab rozgaar ke silsile meN India se baahar jaa rahaa huN aur nayii job ke tahat kaam par zyaadaa tavajjuh hogaa isii liye maiN ghair_haazir rahuNgaa...! mujhe miss mat karnaa aap log bas yaad rakhnaa...! khaak'saar | ||
| silent_rooh Username: Rooh Registered: 08-2005 |
suhel miss to karengey na...humare teacher ji jo jaa rahey hain....han gauhar ko theek kahaa hai aap ne ye kaam karne ko...aap fikr na karein hum aapas mei apnii kavishein discuss kar lenge aur koi mushkil huii to aap ko mail zarur bhejenge....jab bhii time mile reply kar dijiye gaa.. Allah aap ko Kaamiyaab karey aur bahot tarakee de...Aaameen!! khush raho... Regards Rooh | ||
| Sunita Username: Sunita Registered: 05-2005 |
sorry everyone I have been very busy and there has been so much happening that I could not post my assignement. You all are doing well and can carry on with the work as I might not be able to do it any more for a while. wish you all good luck and my best wishes to everyone. | ||
| gauhar |
suhelbhai, yeh kyaa?aap ko miss kare bagair kaise raheNge?phir bhi rozi-roti ka muamlaa hai,to kyaa kar sakte hai?aapko job par to bahut mehnat karni paDegi.yahaaN aaye na aaye,aap apni shaayri ko naa chodiye.likhte rahiye jab bhi waqt mile.jab bhi fursat hogi email se baateN hoNgi hi. aapko naye job par mubaarakbad aur yahi duaa hai,ki aap bahut tariki kareN. best of luck for everything. gauhar | ||
| gauhar |
mere sahpaThi,ham sab zaroor kaam kareNge,let's not leave this class.jise bhi maukaa milegaa likhtaa rahegaa.sunitaaji,aapko jab kaam se fursat mile,tab assignments post kar dijiyegaa.ditto for all of us. ab ham sab ko hi ek doosre ke assignments meiN madad karni hogi.meiN jald hi koi achchi behr DhoonD ke post kar dooNgi,then we can all work and discuss our assignments.is that ok? gauhar | ||
| Sunita Username: Sunita Registered: 05-2005 |
gauhar congrats for being the monitor, you deserve it dear as you have been working hard. I will not be ablee to come to bazm but when ever feel like saying somethinng to you all I will drop a line.Take care all of you.best of luck in your studies. | ||
| Alok |
Suhel Bhai, Aapki yaad to aa kar hi rahegi. Apne ustaad ko koi bhool sakta hai bhala! Gauhar Ji ko monitor banne ki badhaii! Main to is bazm men aane ki koshish karta hi rahoonga, par Sunita Ji ko kya ho gaya. Bazm ka sabse niyamit bachha nadaarad! Ye to burii baat hai!!! | ||
| Sunita Username: Sunita Registered: 05-2005 |
Alok ji maine to kitne samay se kuch likha bhi nahin hai mai kahan niyamit roop mai yahan aati hun aur jo likha hai vo bhi not worth sharing ke baraabar hi. bas aap sab ke likhe hue se seekhane ki koshish karungi. vaise bhi life bahut kuch sikha deti hai.so not to worry beh`r na seekhi to koi baat nahin aur bahut kuch to seekha hi hai. | ||
| gauhar |
sunitaji,alokji,roohji, aap pls. mujhe monitor waghiaraa naa kahe.suhelji ab joNki yahaaN kam aayeNge,to hameN hi milkar yeH silsilaa jaari rakhnaa hai.ham hii khudko assignment deNge aur khud ek-doosre se check karwaayeNge.jo koi assignment de saktaa hai,wo de.abhi mere paas ik khoobsurat behr hai,jispe maine kaam bhi kiyaa hai,isliye woH hi de deti huiN.agle assignment meiN aur kisi ke pass koi achchi behr ho to vo zaroor post karegaa. sunitaji,meraa to yeH haal hai ki aajkal achche sukhan kam hi kaaghaZ pe utarte haiN,behr meiN yaa be-behr meiN.:-( phir bhi jab bhi mood aa jaaye likhtii rehtii huiN.aap bhi jab aapko fursat mile,likhte rahiyegaa. gauhar |